Fang Talks

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It is not what is was when it was just an idea.

But that’s not necessarily a bad thing. In its execution, Charlie and Pip Sqeek has changed to be a different kind of series than I had originally imagined it. It started out as something super silly. Absurd scenarios, humor and gags for children (but without the childishness, so adults can enjoy it too), storyline taking more of a background role despite being the more mature part of the whole. Somewhat similar to how Adventure Time handles things?

Turns out I can’t write comedy even if I try. Not that my comedy sucks, but that it simply isn’t there. I focus too much on the story, its sub-plots, and care too little for the fun shit I can pull in the moment. I am still actively trying to make every episode of C&PS able to stand on its own, but I can see that becoming harder as time continues.
It still involves some serious issues, though most are still on the background at this point in the series. I will try to tackle those from the perspective of a kid, since hey, that’s what the story is told as.

Speaking of, let’s talk style. It’s narrated by Pip, obviously, but in the narration he speaks like a real-deal mature detective. I think this helps a bit with the pretend-y feel I want to give his shenanigans, and it doesn’t restrict me in my writing (unlike having the story narrated by a full-blown eight-year-old). You may have noticed he doesn’t speak as maturely as he narrates, and most of his actions are still those of a kid as well.
When Charlie speaks, his words get italicized, to differentiate between the things Pip hears and what is actually spoken. (Surprise surprise, Charlie is an imaginary friend.) Charlie, for reasons not yet clear in the story, is much more mature than Pip, but is in the “detective” role all the time. He is someone Pip can look up to, strive to be like. I guess you could say Pip is subconsciously catalyzing his personal growth?

In the end though, the story is still meant to be a children’s story in the form of a shitty detective series. Vocabulary may not be suitable for young kids though, so there goes half my target audience. But as I said, it’s supposed to be enjoyable for adults as well. How am I doing with that? (I think it’s going somewhat well overall?)

I need to shoehorn in more silly humor though.
~ Fang

Comments

  • 23/08/2014 (5:49 AM)

    See, I can’t tell if I’m funny or not. There are a lot of times where I think I have something funny to say but you dwell on the idea for so long that you begin to doubt it.

    Comedy is far too difficult to do.

  • 22/08/2014 (11:52 PM)

    I think it’s going pretty well. It’s quirky and simple and I think kids could get a kick out of it. Don’t be too worried about subplots and stuff if you’re going for some silly things. Just write daft stuff in. Like in the last update when I said I was surprised Charlie didn’t get the wrong house. Or when he was reaching up on the shelf, he could have fallen and had the books land on him. He still finds the books and something silly happens.

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